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I thought I was reading writing from a real reporter visiting real weirdos for a bit longer than I'd like to admit; so the tone is def. on point. It started out like something right out of sneerclub.

The blending of eugenics with silicon valley style corporate "ethics" and excess gives an interesting setting; and sprinkling in so many quotes / product names / etc. was nice for worldbuilding and setting the scene.

I was left with lots of unanswered questions (I assume deliberately); this leaves a lot to the imagination including some threads that would be too openly dark for this sort of gilded setting. Or with the setting being so transitional it's possible that even this company hasn't thought through of what will happen 10, 20 years in the future as they move fast and break things to chase after the next quarters earnings.

Sorry I suck at giving criticism so this is just all stuff I liked. The following is my best shot at actual criticism:

The ending did confuse me a bit and felt a little out of place: I had to go back and re-read it a second time to get the mood I feel it was trying to invoke. Citrus being mentioned 5 times made me wonder if I was missing a deeper meaning. But on re-reading citrus definitely makes sense as a theme: having both a lovely natural scent from oranges and lemons and a sterile artifical sent from cleaning products or air fresheners.

Similarly I thought I might be missing something with the woman being surprised by headlights at dusk; though looking back natural dusk and sudden artificial headlights does pair well with the transitional setting of the story.