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Oh god thank you. Thats every compliment I could've hoped for.
Youre reading it exactly as I intended it to be read.
I actually struggled with the ending, I wasn't sure if I should keep the ending as if was, part of a neutral article or offer a more personal opinion of the journalist. I do think I muddled it a little in terms of mood. I'm trying go evoke awe and fear but my personal biases made fear the dominant emotion of the piece.
You're correct about citrus. That was the intent.
Similarly correct about the headlights. I actually feared it was a bit too on the nose.
PS. Youre the perfect reader for me lmao.